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Comment on PAWS Chicago the city’s largest No Kill animal… by Kristina Marynczak

Kristina Marynczak — Wed, 22 Feb 2012 20:10:28 +0000

hello. I really understand the issue you are trying to present because your paper is organized. The only doubts I have is how much research you did into PAWS. Is PAWS Chicago a subgroup of The Peoplefor The Etnical Treatment of Animals (PAWS) You mention they have saved alot of pets from being killed but did you ever research how many animals they have euthenized themselves? I think maybe to give your paper more opportunity you should mention other organizations that are local to help take action in the stopping of animal cruelty besdies one that mighht not have a too much liked reputation. Please feel free to correct me though if I am thinking of the wrong group..

Comment on Drowning In Plastic by Dawn Murry

Dawn Murry — Wed, 22 Feb 2012 19:18:23 +0000

I really enjoy reading your paper on the world is polluted with plastic. That title fit in perfect! I feel that title provider truly supported all of the description that you were given. This plastic that is floating in our water at the bottom of the ocean can hurt the food we eat. This could be one of the problems on why people around the world keep getting sick with all these different illness that is taking place. When you pollute the water you just don’t know how that affects the world we live in. I missed the esipode that Oprah had on about the water been contaminated. We just don’t know how all of things out here are pretty much killing us slowly. We think it is one thing and then later you find out that it is something totally different. All of this is from something that we have consumed. You just would believe how this plays a role in a major part of our lives. If everyone like you stated come together as a whole what a world this would be. It is a village to raise kids and a mountain and a Mo hill to clean a land. Just because, a world knowing that this killing the place we live everyone should come together and map out a plan on how to clean the world we live in. hey, maybe by the time we map it out then the mayor of each cities will see how this worked out so, well then it can create more jobs for our Americans to obtain and keep the flow of things going smoother. It is so, much in the world that we have to beware of.

Now, as far as your paper goes topic was wondering as you by the statement I made. I see you did some research on your topic but, I’m not sure where the research came from. This would be in relation to your work cited page. I think you should give a little more details so, I can see a clear visual on what you are explaining. Let us know details on the people, maybe the color of the boats or even how they went about clearing some of the unwanted plastic. Not sure if all the topics was touched at a hundred percent. I feel you should explain a little more on how you can implement service or activism into this topic in order to make this part of any community we live in. I love the way you give specific examples on overview of the subject, you give great information on background information with strong details to support the subject, you even give current information on the topic on of choice and you give information on what some people are trying to do now. Overall, this was an excellent essay that you have put together. Job well done

Comment on After reading the “village voice” it made me… by Emmanuel Morales

Emmanuel Morales — Wed, 22 Feb 2012 14:45:50 +0000

I completely forgot about the citation. I just fixed it. Next time i won’t forget. Thanks Prof Mcguire for pointing it out.

Comment on After reading the “village voice” it made me… by Prof McGuire

Prof McGuire — Wed, 22 Feb 2012 07:10:31 +0000

A citation?

Comment on This week while catching up on the chapter… by Prof McGuire

Prof McGuire — Wed, 22 Feb 2012 05:41:44 +0000

The citation needs work, and be sure to categorize these as “Research/Reading Journal” entries, so I don’t accidentally miss it when I’m checking them in. Thanks.

Comment on In a first chapter of “Why White Rice… by Dawn Murry

Dawn Murry — Thu, 16 Feb 2012 16:08:59 +0000

I totally agree with you Gregorz because, everything in the high school settings is developed so much on structure it’s ridiculous. I feel also that they need to focus more on what the interests of the students are and incorporated it into the lesson plan. This way you gain there interest, develop their emotions and teach the structure that you are trying to do. Then everyone wins!

Comment on What I live, die, and kill for. by Michael Millasp

Michael Millasp — Thu, 16 Feb 2012 06:37:09 +0000

I like how you jumped right into the assignment, instead of beating around the bush. You got right to the point, not messing around! I love that you would do anything for a family member, which anyone and everyone should! They are you blood and have always been there for you when you’re down. When it comes to “yo momma” jokes, I really don’t take them as personally as you do because even though its about my precious mom who I love so much, I know they are just joking around and its all for shits and giggles. So I just cold-shoulder them. To be honest with you, I don’t understand why people get so many tattoos because when you get older; don’t they just stretch out and look weird? I’m in no place to judge you or your father. His tattoos can have meanings to them, which is great. I don’t understand either why people would come to the conclusion that your father is a gang-banger because he is all tatted up. That’s absurd. My friends always have my back as well. That’s what they are for. A true friend would never go behind your back or disrespect your choices. If they are indeed a friend they should understand and respect who you are (unless drugs). Friends are great part of life.
What you would do for those who are in need is a great attribute to have that many don’t have. I love that you would go out of your way to help kids with Leukemia and other illnesses. Your right, the kids that mope and around and think their life sucks, isn’t that attitude they need. They need to stay positive and say “hey, I’m going to make it through this”. It’s very respectable that you want to be that guy to make those kids happy and cherish the life that they have. More people need to have the same belief about this topic as you do. I do volunteer work for charities as well. The one I do the most is for St. Judes, which is hospital for kids who have cancer. I do charity basketball games and ride my bike for hours at a time for cancer every year. It’s a great thing to do, to help those who need it most. I like your opinion on bullying. I have the same exact feeling. I hate hearing about kids committing suicide because of being bullied by people. Especially those kids who are bigger and older and picking on kids smaller and younger. Pick on someone your own size and see what happens to you. Bullies are nothing but low life scum bags that don’t like the life that they live in and take it out on innocent kids.
That is a great thing to kill for, success. You want to be an NFL or AFL football player. I really hope the best for you in that field. You love playing football and I love watching football just as much as playing. That sucks that you didn’t make it to the top 5 to be on the Chicago Rush Football team, but maybe you can try out next year and make the cut if that opportunity comes your way again!
This was a very well written essay. I agree with all of your choices to Live, Die, Kill for. Try to make this essay a little bit longer though, because I think it needs to be 1500 words long. So maybe try to expand on your ideas a little more and bring up stories from your past to help the reader understand why you chose that topic.

Comment on Live? Die? Kill? by Michael Millasp

Michael Millasp — Thu, 16 Feb 2012 06:05:22 +0000

Your essay has lots of potential behind it. It could be a great essay with lots of meaning. You need to add 800 more words to it though. From the stuff I read in your essay, that shouldn’t be hard. Expand more on your ideas and bring up more ideas. Give more examples and explain them in deep thought. The pursuit of knowledge is a great thing to live for because knowledge is one of life’s greatest gifts to people. Not a lot of people get the opportunity like most do when it comes to receiving good education. I learn a lot from personal experience. I agree with you that experience helps more than some teacher/professor explaining it to you on a whiteboard or PowerPoint can. I find it difficult myself when it comes to deciding my field of study. I find new things interesting in all sorts of studies everyday that I am unsure about which I would love to study and pursue and education in that field. We both need to decide quickly though because we don’t have all that much time to decide what we want to do for the rest of our lives! I am a very competitive when it comes to sports but not academics. I mean I try to do better than the other person next to me just to show off, but otherwise I try my hardest and in the end that means most to me. The ultimate satisfaction when completing a long hard homework assignment knows that I accomplished it and I put my best effort into. If my teacher doesn’t appreciate it and gives me a bad grade for it, then I don’t take it personally because I know what I did and I am proud of that. I was confused reading your statements about what you “Kill”. You seemed to be very uncertain on what you would kill for, but at the same time it seemed like you don’t want to kill at all because it takes away another’s opportunity to live. I mean I understand that statement, but I think you need to add examples and go into deeper thought when it comes to your “Kill” statements. I’m not very sure, but I didn’t read anything that you would die for. And if you did, I’m sorry it was very unclear then. You did a great job with your choice of vocabulary and grammar, all you really need to do is add in examples and go into even deeper thoughts on your topics that are presented. Make your “kill” statement just as long or maybe even longer than your “live” statement because it seems like you could go on more in your last paragraph. Overall, it is a great paper with great leads. Just add in something’s here and there and make it 800 words longer because this paper needs to be 1500 words long if you didn’t know. Great job and I hoped I helped you like I hope I did.

Comment on Live.Die.Kill by Michael Millasp

Michael Millasp — Thu, 16 Feb 2012 05:35:31 +0000

Your first paragraph seemed like you did not know what to write about just yet, and when you kept typing and rambling, you finally found out what to write, something I do a lot. I know exactly where you are coming from. What do you live for? Pretty much everything you wrote down I agree with you. You live you for the future, and you should because the future is unknown, and it can bring either fortune or unfortunate. It is sometimes best to live one day at a time because if you look forward or plan for the future too much, you can easily disappoint yourself if something doesn’t go your way. Your right, the next day is a new beginning and you should live that day like nothing happened the day before. Voicing your opinion really helps in the long haul because you can not keep relying on the same people everyday to ask the questions and voicing their opinion when your just sitting their with a whole different opinion on something. Personally, that’s what I’ve done my entire school years. I’ve always relied on other people to voice their opinions and hoping it would answer my questions or agree with my personal beliefs. When they didn’t, then I was just lost. In college, I have definitely changed my whole school ethic and voiced my opinions now. I mean technically no one really lives for mistakes because nobody wants to make mistakes. They just happen. But you’re right, without making mistakes we wouldn’t learn and mature as adults. Mistakes help us realize what we did wrong and how to make things right. When I kept reading your paper, I can tell your live for a lot of things, which isn’t bad, but you definitely made it clear that you would rather live for something than to kill or die for something. I live for honesty as well. Nobody likes to be lied, it isn’t right nor does it make you feel good. I’ve been lied to many times and it makes me feel like shit.
Nobody wants to die, your right on that part. I would risk my life for my family anyday of the week, no hesitation. They are your blood and life. My friends on the other, it depends how close they are to me. I love that you said you would die for your family because its just a necessity. They would do the exact it for you, so I would do the same for them. If I had to loan money to a family member, I would because I would do anything to help them when they are in need. I would never want to see a family member suffer, it wouldn’t sit well with me at all. My family bond is very strong just like yours. I have a big family. We all live in one town, so we pretty much make up the population. Its nice to have a great bond with your family because they are the ones that are closest to you.
When you were talking about your “Kill” portion of the assignment, I wasn’t very sure what you mean you would kill for. I’m assuming self-protection and self-dense? It is always nice to be safe and to know you will not get harmed. I talk the talk all the time, but rarely do I walk the walk, but it is great to know some self-defense skills like Jiu-Jitsu or like kickboxing, it comes in handy trust.
Overall, great writing, it seems as if you were just writing down whatever was on your mind, which is respectable. Make sure you re-read and edit because if you some grammar and punctuation errors that need to be fixed.

Comment on what are the requirements for the 4 paper… by Selina Littlefield

Selina Littlefield — Thu, 16 Feb 2012 02:12:52 +0000

Thank you! yes it did